Friday, October 22, 2010

This is a narrative written by Chloe. There is a theme in this narrative which she has worked hard to bring forth to the readers.

It was a sunny day and the sun was shining brightly. It was a typical summer’s day in Folkerston. The wind was blowing lazily and the flowers swayed as if they were enjoying a classical piece by an orchestra. Inside a bach a teenage girl sits at her table looking as if she was in despair.

Her name is Ruby. She always looks sad and angry because she is always bored and always too shy to go outside and play. Every time she looks outside she sees the other children playing with their best friends and laughing. Secretly she wanted to experience the joy the other children had with their friends but she never has the courage to join in.

One day Ruby was looking outside and saw a car driving in to the next house. She then saw a little girl hop out of the car really excited and jumping up and down. “Melina stop moving around so much” her mother said. “I heard the girl next door is a really nice girl. Why don’t you go over and say hello”.

Ruby couldn’t believe someone had said she is a nice girl. She is always being put down by others and has never heard a compliment from anyone but her mother. Before she could think again there was a knock at the door. Ruby walked over and opened the door. Standing there with some cookies was a little girl with a bright smile. “Hi there, my name is Melina. I will be your neighbour for the holidays”. Ruby could not say anything for a while. She then smiled at the little girl and asked her to come inside.

They started talking about their schools and how the children are. Ruby told Melina she does not have any friends and Melina was shocked at her confession. “Well, I will be your first friend, and I hope to be your best friend too” Melina said.

The next two weeks went like the wind. The two girls spent so much time together. They went walking in the park every day and counted how many birds they saw in the trees. They baked chocolate chip cookies using Ruby’s unique recipe which included cinnamon. Melina said she has never tasted such nice cookies and will never stop making cookies.

Ruby felt as if she was in a dream. She never thought she would find so much joy from having a friend. Especially a friend so much younger than her. On the day Melina was returning home to start school, Ruby gave her a necklace she made herself. As the girls hugged Melina’s mother asked Ruby if she wanted to visit them during the next holidays. Ruby accepted the offer and felt as if she was walking on clouds.

1 comment:

Mrs Tofa said...

You have put so much thought into your narrative Chloe. I really like the introduction to the setting and the character of Ruby. Awesome work. Keep it up.